【雅思寫作】十大常見錯誤透析(下)
不間斷句子(run-on sentences)
什么叫不間斷句子,請看下面的例子:
1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world.
分析:
這個句子包含了2層完整的意思“There are many ways”以及“we get to know the outside world”,簡單地把它們連在一起就不妥當(dāng)了。
改為:There are many ways for us to get to know the outside world.或者There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.
措辭毛?。╰roubles in diction)
措辭是指在特定的句子中如何恰當(dāng)?shù)剡x用詞語的問題,由于很多因素的制約,比如上課時間有限,老師在這方面作的指導(dǎo)相對來說就比較少,因此導(dǎo)致了學(xué)生在平時寫作中沒有養(yǎng)成良好的推敲,斟酌的習(xí)慣。他們往往隨心所欲,拿來就用。所以作文中措辭不當(dāng)?shù)牡胤奖缺冉允牵?/p>
1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.
(農(nóng)業(yè)中不斷增加的化學(xué)物質(zhì)的使用也造成了污染)
分析:
顯然,考生把“obstacles”“障礙物”當(dāng)做“物質(zhì)”來使用了,另外,“the increasing use”(不斷增加的使用)應(yīng)該改為“abusive use”(濫用)。
改為:The abusive use of chemical substance in agriculture also leads to pollution.
累贅(redundancy)
強烈建議考生們在寫作中語言以簡潔為貴,寫句子沒有一個多余的詞;寫段落沒有一個無必要的句子。能用單詞的不用詞組;能用詞組的不用從句或者句子,如:
1. In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.
分析:
本句中的“In spite of the fact that he is lazy”是同位語從句,按照我們上面說的能用詞組不用從句,
改為:In spite of his laziness, I like him.
2. For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the things they need.
分析:
整個句子太羅嗦,可以大大簡化:
改為:Diligent, caring people use money only to buy things they need.
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