這個(gè)系列來自滬江部落“四六級作文訓(xùn)練營：改詞擴(kuò)句”，本節(jié)目適合備考英語四級和英語六級的朋友，以及有志于提高英語寫作水平的朋友，旨在幫助大家寫英文作文時(shí)，用語更加地道和規(guī)范。

本期主要講分詞做插入語的效果。

例句：

You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.

改句：

You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.

解析：我們可以看到例句中有3個(gè)簡單句，咋看上去給人一種啰嗦、累贅的感覺。但細(xì)看之下，不難發(fā)現(xiàn)3個(gè)句子的主語全部是you，因此我們就該聯(lián)想到同位語、插入語的應(yīng)用。從改句中，我們可以發(fā)現(xiàn)謂語從原來的3個(gè)變成了1個(gè)，頓時(shí)使句子顯得高級，精簡很多。其次，還有一個(gè)改動之處為"good"，這個(gè)詞是常用詞，口語中用的更頻繁些，我們可以想一些同義詞例如"excellent"，"outstanding"等等。

下面請大家試試看吧！
1.He depended on his families' support to find a good job. One of his friends looked downed on him.

答案：

Depending on his families' support, he found a decent a job, which was despised by one of his friends.

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