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公開課內(nèi)容提要：

陳永標(biāo)攜妻跪謝鄭益龍烈士的妻子和父母。
The Chens devoutly kneel down with good grace

題解：這次我們聚焦感動(dòng)中國的一件人間大愛的事件。重點(diǎn)學(xué)習(xí)漢語具體語境下，如何進(jìn)行語義信息整合、處理和翻譯的方法和技巧。

3月9日，被鄭益龍烈士救起的陳永標(biāo)攜妻在廣州跪謝鄭益龍烈士的妻子和父母。
On March 9, Chen Yongbiao and his wife knelt down in front of the wife and parents of Zheng Yilong, who was drowned in saving Chen Yongbiao.?

解析：中文原文有這樣的表述：“把鄭益龍的父母當(dāng)成自己的父母，把鄭益龍的孩子當(dāng)成自己的孩子”。一般的學(xué)習(xí)者或譯者會(huì)選用“treat Zheng’s parents as his own parents and his child as his own child”,這樣的譯文是多么膚淺呀，沒有任何優(yōu)美之感，讀起來很沉悶。但是這里采用了整合中文信息，并經(jīng)深思熟慮，將整體信息集中表述：“?in the coming days, he would treat the beloved ones of Mr. Zheng as his own loved ones with good care and due consideration.?”

陳永標(biāo)說自己心里非常自責(zé)，寧愿走的那個(gè)人是自己。陳永標(biāo)告訴記者，未來的日子里，會(huì)把鄭益龍的父母當(dāng)成自己的父母，把鄭益龍的孩子當(dāng)成自己的孩子。
Chen Yongbiao said he was remorsefully tormented and wished that Zheng Yilong could remain alive. He said to the reporter, in the coming days, he would hold the fort by treating the beloved ones of Mr. Zheng as his own loved ones with good care and due consideration.

解析： 中文原文有這樣的表述：“把鄭益龍的父母當(dāng)成自己的父母，把鄭益龍的孩子當(dāng)成自己的孩子”。 一般的學(xué)習(xí)者或譯者會(huì)選用“treat Zheng’s parents as his own parents and his child as his own child”, 這樣的譯文是多么膚淺呀，沒有任何優(yōu)美之感，讀起來很沉悶。

但是這里采用了整合中文信息，并經(jīng)深思熟慮，將整體信息集中表述：“?in the coming days, he would treat the beloved ones of Mr. Zheng as his own loved ones with good care and due consideration.?”?

3月4日晚8時(shí)50分許，苦苦搜尋了4天之后，在珠江救人而失蹤的武警廣州支隊(duì)四大隊(duì)副教導(dǎo)員鄭益龍的遺體，終于被發(fā)現(xiàn)并打撈上岸。
At 8:50 p.m. March 4, after the retrieval and search lasted four days, the body of Zheng Yilong, the deputy political instructor of No. 4 Battalion of Guangzhou People's Armed Police Detachment, was finally located and hauled out of the Pearl River where Zheng tried hard to save a drowning man but was drowned himself.??

解析： (1)苦苦搜尋了4天之后 =after the retrieval and search lasted four days ；這里的“retrieval ”的動(dòng)詞形式為“retrieve” (rescue or save=營救或挽救);

(2)”在珠江救人而失蹤的武警廣州支隊(duì)四大隊(duì)副教導(dǎo)員鄭益龍的遺體，終于被發(fā)現(xiàn)并打撈上岸 “。這個(gè)句子細(xì)節(jié)信息非常多，漢語表述簡單，可是英文表述就要注重句法和邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)的處理，不然英語譯文真的就是“翻譯來的”。?

the body? was finally located and hauled out of the Pearl River where Zheng tried hard to save a drowning man but was drowned himself.? 同時(shí)注意“drowning”和“drowned”在同一句中用法的對比效應(yīng)。

3月1日中午，汕頭人陳永標(biāo)在珠江西堤碼頭拍照不慎掉進(jìn)珠江，正好途經(jīng)此地的鄭益龍看到這一幕，立刻跳入江中抱住了溺水的陳永標(biāo)。
At noon March 1, Chen Yongbiao, a native of Shantou, suddenly fell into the Pearl River when he was amusing himself for photos taken at Xidi Pier on the Pearl River. At this critical moment, Zheng Yilong saw all this and sensed the danger, jumping into the river without much ado to firmly grip the drowning man.?

解析：（1）中文信息“正好途經(jīng)此地的鄭益龍看到這一幕”，如何理解并解讀很關(guān)鍵。閻老師在處理這個(gè)信息過程中，只注重重要信息，而忽略次要的細(xì)節(jié)信息：”At this critical moment （緊急關(guān)頭）, Zheng Yilong saw all this （看到這一幕） and sensed the danger（同時(shí)意識(shí)到危險(xiǎn)和人民群眾的生命安全受到威脅）”。

珠江水急，落水者又不斷掙扎，鄭益龍只能一手托起落水者，一手劃水，向岸邊靠攏，不久體力不支, 不幸被激流沖走并沉入江中。
The river current violently rushed by and the drowning man restlessly struggled in the river. Holding the man atop the surface with one hand, Zheng clumsily thrashed the water with the other. He tried to swim toward the bank all in his full strength, only to find himself totally exhausted half way when he was unfortunately swept away by the violent waves, lost in the river.

解析：這段文字是對救人場面的細(xì)節(jié)性描述，涉及到很多具體的動(dòng)作行為。實(shí)際上任何一位譯者要想把這些連貫的動(dòng)作表述得非常精準(zhǔn)，都是一件不容易的事兒。

（1）“珠江水急，落水者又不斷掙扎 =The river current violently rushed by and the drowning man restlessly struggled in the river.”

（2）“鄭益龍只能一手托起落水者，一手劃水 =Holding the man atop the surface with one hand, Zheng clumsily thrashed the water with the other.”

（3）“向岸邊靠攏，不久體力不支, 不幸被激流沖走并沉入江中 =?tried to swim toward the bank all in his full strength, only to find himself totally exhausted half way when he was unfortunately swept away by the violent waves, lost in the river.