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本期作文題目：

芬利尼先生決定接受安吉拉.戈達(dá)德的邀請(qǐng), 寫(xiě)一封接受邀請(qǐng)的回信,字?jǐn)?shù)在120-140字左右.

感謝戈達(dá)德女士的來(lái)信；
對(duì)她的各項(xiàng)建議表示感興趣；
接受她請(qǐng)你去看戲的邀請(qǐng)；
對(duì)她提同的日期表示不合適作出解釋?zhuān)?br>建議另改日程。

提示：寫(xiě)信時(shí)可注意把握行文語(yǔ)氣的正式程度和禮貌委婉。

Sample

Dear Ms. Goddard:

Thank you very much for your letter on 4th Aug.

I feel pretty interested in the proposals that you have mentioned in your letter and so do our directors. I hope that we could have further discussion on it later on.

I think I really love your idea of going to the theatre together next Tuesday at 8:00 p.m. Unfortunately, I'll pay a regular visit to my client on that day.

Could it be possible for you to change the schedule? I'll be available next Thursday. I'd appreciate if you could change the arrangements.

I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely yours

網(wǎng)友作文一：

Dear Ms.Angelia,
I'm appreciated that you are very prompt in answering my letter[1] .
It's intersting[2] what you advice in promting programe from all angles.
Thank you for inviting me to go to the theatre at 8:00 next monday. But i will be tied up at the moment because of regular meeting. There are 3 days available for me next week which from Tue. to sat.Would[3] you mind changing the time?

sincerely
Philiy
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[1]Thanks for answering my letter, as reference to your letter dated ....
[2]I'm interested in what you have proposed about the program, I hope that we can have further discussion on it.
[3]Maybe it could be more advisable if we can change the schedule.

網(wǎng)友作文二：

To Ms. Gettad,
It is my pleasure to receive your last letter. Thank you for it! In it, you have offered us many suggestions in various aspects. I take great interest in them. Maybe we could have a further discussion about them[1] .
And also in that letter, you invited me to watch a movie toghter, I would accept it, for it's my great honor[2] .
Last but not least[3] , it concerns the time that is inappropriate. I'm really sorry for that. But I suppose there must be something you have to know. Our manager was too busy with the project, dueing to unexpected issues. I hope we could reach understading on this. We will pay a visit to your company tomorrow and change the exact time.
Wish you everything goes well.（去掉）
Your sincerely
Finely

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[1]整個(gè)意思表述得很清楚，只是語(yǔ)言方面太幼稚了。
Thanks for your letter on 3rd, July, which gave us useful proposal on the project ongoing. We feel pretty interested in that and hope that we can have further discussion.
[2]受漢語(yǔ)影響了。
As for your invitation of watching a movie together, I'd really appreciate it if it is possible that we rearrange the timetable since I would be out of town.
[3]這是個(gè)口語(yǔ)中的句子，在信件中使用不夠正式。